Help?! My Harem is Trying to Kill Me!

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I will be honest, I thought the story would be super cringe given the subject matter, but after reading it a bit, I found that it's quite enjoyable. It needs some cleaning up with punctuation, grammar, and so on, but from what I've read so far, it's worth reading.

can see what it's tryna go for, but it ain't hittin well until the writing issues are addressed. the pov and thoughts help make it feel a bit personal to the reader, but the writing style or lack of gives way to reality while reading. (also, try and find the artist of the cover, writer. ask if they're fine with your use, and credit them properly as a form of respect. if you can't, use a diff cover.)